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Listen, the girls swallowed by whales are the ones that grow up lucky.

Listen, no one will warn you about the little boys with the magpie eyes and the fists swinging splinters of glass. No one will warn you that their smiles are sweeter than their words are sweeter than their souls are sweeter than their intentions. No one will warn you of the sheer weight of the world.

Listen, sometimes girls are fragile. Sometimes girls are frothy. Sometimes girls let boys nuzzle "I love you"s into their necks and sometimes girls drink the wine of believing them.

Listen, sometimes the boys really are sweet, and little girls' tart puckered mouths can't taste the difference.

Listen, writers are the ones that drip fishhooks down their throats to coax out their hearts. Writers are the ones who fling those heart-hooks into the sea even if they have a message but not a bottle. Listen, sometimes fish swallow them. Some of those fish sink to the bottom of the ocean with the weight of the world in those hearts those Plath hearts, those Hemingway hearts and some of them grow feathers.

Listen, I can tell you to try to grow a feather-heart but I'm forgetting that one day, most days, you will not be a girl with feathers. Most days you will understand the weeping of water and whales. You will try and fail to shed your heavy bones and you will try to forget the whale's mournful song and your heart will be too weighted to even imagine the lightness of seafoam.

Listen, you can unwrap your heart from the blackbird's feathers or you can unravel the whale-song from your throat but Pangaea will never fit itself back together. You can't steal back your fishhook and swallow your heart again.

Listen, though: you might not have a seafoam smile or a fishhook with a feathered heart but you can throw yourself into the ocean after it. You can chase that weighted heart to the bottom of the sea, you can wring every ounce of song from it, you can sing your pain into poetry and shame that un-sweet boy like he wouldn't believe.

Listen, the girls with the heavy hearts will drink the wine and believe the sweet nothings and drip fishhooks down their throats to coax out a heart with the weight of the Pacific. Listen, the girls with the heavy hearts are the ones who dive in after them.

Listen, the heart will sink and the girl will sink and a whale will swallow them both because he hears the whale-song pouring from her eyes.

And listen, that whale will grow feathers.
True story.

Maybe someday I'll write about the boys who are swallowed by whales.

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Requested Critique:
This piece was written after a breakup, so it has a focus on young girls and their relationships to boys. Does that specificity detract from the bigger themes of the work?

PS:
dysrhythmic recorded a beautiful spoken-verse rendition of this piece for The Elocutionists. If you'd like to take a listen, you can check that out here.
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Given 2012-12-22
Whale Songs of the Pacific by ~Sora-Seraph The suggester writes, "Odd in a refreshing way, emotional but calm and thoughtful as well. " ( Suggested by YogaTeacher and Featured by thorns )
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akkajess Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Student Writer
Hi!
Your amazing work has been featured here: akkajess.deviantart.com/journa…
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Many thanks! :hug:
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pinballwitch Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
Congrats on the DD :nod:
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Many thanks (: It was exceedingly unexpected haha
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HoneyandChai Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is soooo beautiful. :')
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Phenomenal! :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
so nice to see this in my inbox again.

if I could fav it again I would.

beautiful spoken-verse rendition indeed.

oh, and congrats on the DD. much deserved.
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're so sweet, thank you!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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PossumFan Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. This is awesome. I especially love disrhythmic's take on it. <3

+ fave
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
She did a beautiful job. <3
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PossumFan Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
She sure did.
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
Oh my gosh, this is beautiful. :heart:

-fidgets- Would you mind if I read this aloud? I'm a member of #Elocutionists and we have a blog where we post audio versions of great dA lit--I'd love to include this. :heart: You can listen here: [link]

Let me know, yeah? :D
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh wow, that's amazing! As long as my work is credited/linked, I'd absolutely love to hear it spoken. If you do end up recording it, would you mind sending me the link? I'd love to listen. (:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
Awesome! You can give it a listen here: [link] Just download the file. ^^ If you like it, I'll post it and link back to this deviation and your page. :heart:
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think it's absolutely stunning. :rose:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
:heart:

It's up! [link]

If you wouldn't mind adding that link to the description, I can submit this to the #Elocutionists gallery. :heart:
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's up. (: Submit away!
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
:heart:
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Blacksand459 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Incredible. This is absolutely beautiful! B-)

Congrats on a well-deserved DD and DLD!!
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Professional Writer
I love this so much, it is brilliant and I am SO glad it got a DD! The concept is beautiful, the writing lovely...just perfect.
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anapests-and-ink Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Every now and then, you read something that sweeps you up and takes your breath away. This is incredible.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
ohmygoshohmygoshohmygoshohmygosh CONGRATS ON THE DD!!!! :la:
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Aemi Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i find this a little awkward to read. Each 'listen' makes the sentences disjointed, while the rest of the sentence afterwards tries to keep it cohesive, and the whole thing ends up fighting with itself.

Yet at the same time, that fight kinda works. The little girls with the sunken hearts war with their want to fly again just like the sentences and the paragraphs fight to hold together.

Overall, it left me feeling nostalgic; that kind of sad happiness one gets when remembering an old love.
Smiling through the tears. :)
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I hope they're good tears. (:
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TeaForLeeLee Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012
This is beautiful and really speaks to me as I'm going through an extremely difficult time right now.
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I wish you strength and peace and joy. :heart:
You can get through this!
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TeaForLeeLee Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
Hey, thank you. I appreciate that very much. When I first signed up here (yesterday. haha), I didn't realize you could post poems and stuff. I'll probably be posting some of mine.
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BornWithTheSun Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You've probably gotten a ton of this today, but I really like this. :D Faving so I can go back and read it again. I thought the little boy/little girl metaphor really added to the piece, since younger girls are more likely to believe boys who tell romantic lies. Great job, and thanks for sharing!
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! It means an incredible amount to me that someone wants to come back to my words to read them again. :love:
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BornWithTheSun Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem! :D
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SilverSoulArtist Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Student General Artist
My gosh this is simply breathtaking~ :heart:
I enjoyed reading this very much, congrates on your DD. You most definitely deserved it :clap:
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, love! :love:
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RadMadisaur Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
What a cool, mysterious, strange yet enticing poem!
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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witwitch Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Student Writer
I really enjoyed this, however, the repetition of "listen" is just too much. It's almost redundant, and I found myself skipping over the word as I was reading because it disrupted so much of the flow of the language for me.
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Tianithen Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I read this once and loved it, I read it again straight away and loved it all the more. It is beautiful both in it's words and it's message. I don't think the boy-girl focus detracts from everything, I can see how the situation in the poem could be extrapolated to cover other relationships or life in general.
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Random-Star Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is the kind of poem that I want to hear read aloud. A lot of beautiful images, the word choice was amazing.

As for the requested critique, I don't personally feel like specifying 'girls' and 'boys' detracts from the work. It adds something personal, I think, that no matter your gender, you can appreciate, even if you don't necessarily relate to the pronouns used.

Congratulations on the DD, very well-deserved. :)
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random-drawer-person Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
One of the strangest poems I've read but I love it all the same. Beautifully written. ^^
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Raichlian Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012
This is beautiful! So thought-provoking, so lyrical, so deep! you have a gift with words!
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, thank you!
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Raichlian Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
np:) May I watch you?
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Of course! I'd be flattered.
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thirdmoth Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
I really love this - great metaphor.
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Gryffgirl Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012
Lovely, lyrical prose and images. Congratulations on your DD!
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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breezeblown Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012
"Listen, writers are the ones that drip fishhooks down their throats to coax out their hearts." What a captivating image! A well-written poem to ignite the imagination. Fantastic job!
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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woot4anime64 Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Student General Artist
This makes me think of an owl city song xD but very well written, I really get the feeling of bitterness and regret.
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FractalEyes Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is special.
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