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Listen, the girls swallowed by whales are the ones that grow up lucky.

Listen, no one will warn you about the little boys with the magpie eyes and the fists swinging splinters of glass. No one will warn you that their smiles are sweeter than their words are sweeter than their souls are sweeter than their intentions. No one will warn you of the sheer weight of the world.

Listen, sometimes girls are fragile. Sometimes girls are frothy. Sometimes girls let boys nuzzle "I love you"s into their necks and sometimes girls drink the wine of believing them.

Listen, sometimes the boys really are sweet, and little girls' tart puckered mouths can't taste the difference.

Listen, writers are the ones that drip fishhooks down their throats to coax out their hearts. Writers are the ones who fling those heart-hooks into the sea even if they have a message but not a bottle. Listen, sometimes fish swallow them. Some of those fish sink to the bottom of the ocean with the weight of the world in those hearts – those Plath hearts, those Hemingway hearts – and some of them grow feathers.

Listen, I can tell you to try to grow a feather-heart but I'm forgetting that one day, most days, you will not be a girl with feathers. Most days you will understand the weeping of water and whales. You will try and fail to shed your heavy bones and you will try to forget the whale's mournful song and your heart will be too weighted to even imagine the lightness of seafoam.

Listen, you can unwrap your heart from the blackbird's feathers or you can unravel the whale-song from your throat but Pangaea will never fit itself back together. You can't steal back your fishhook and swallow your heart again.

Listen, though: you might not have a seafoam smile or a fishhook with a feathered heart but you can throw yourself into the ocean after it. You can chase that weighted heart to the bottom of the sea, you can wring every ounce of song from it, you can sing your pain into poetry and shame that un-sweet boy like he wouldn't believe.

Listen, the girls with the heavy hearts will drink the wine and believe the sweet nothings and drip fishhooks down their throats to coax out a heart with the weight of the Pacific. Listen, the girls with the heavy hearts are the ones who dive in after them.

Listen, the heart will sink and the girl will sink and a whale will swallow them both because he hears the whale-song pouring from her eyes.

And listen, that whale will grow feathers.
True story.

Maybe someday I'll write about the boys who are swallowed by whales.

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Requested Critique:
• This piece was written after a breakup, so it has a focus on young girls and their relationships to boys. Does that specificity detract from the bigger themes of the work?

PS:
dysrhythmic recorded a beautiful spoken-verse rendition of this piece for The Elocutionists. If you'd like to take a listen, you can check that out here.
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Given 2012-12-22
Whale Songs of the Pacific by ~Sora-Seraph The suggester writes, "Odd in a refreshing way, emotional but calm and thoughtful as well. " ( Suggested by YogaTeacher and Featured by thorns )
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akkajess Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Student Writer
Hi!
Your amazing work has been featured here: akkajess.deviantart.com/journa…
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Many thanks! :hug:
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pinballwitch Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
Congrats on the DD :nod:
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Many thanks (: It was exceedingly unexpected haha
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HoneyandChai Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is soooo beautiful. :')
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Phenomenal! :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
so nice to see this in my inbox again.

if I could fav it again I would.

beautiful spoken-verse rendition indeed.

oh, and congrats on the DD. much deserved.
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Sora-Seraph Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're so sweet, thank you!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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PossumFan Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. This is awesome. I especially love disrhythmic's take on it. <3

+ fave
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